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I am a fallen angel,
I fell from the skies of
Heaven,
and landed on Hell.

I was lost,
until I met you,
the Devil,
you were a perfect weapon
for protection.

You and I were unbroken,
we even decided to
set the world on fire.....

Until the day betrayed 
me.
I was so upset that
I even lost my wings,
and died.

In the end I realised
that you were using me,
and for that I will never
let you seal my coffin.

I hope you remember 
my last goodbye,
because that is the last 
good memory you will 
ever have.

I hope you burn in your home,
in the fires of Hell.


PandoraMichaelis

little poem on how I feel about my friendship break up..oh yeah do any of you notice something? Hint: it has something to do with Black Veil Brides...:D
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UmeMuhinyi99 Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013
is it ok to draw the life of a fallen angel please
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PandoraMichaelis Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
sure! ^-^
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UmeMuhinyi99 Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013
oh thank i sure i credit you but love your Watercolor cat it so breathtaking
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PandoraMichaelis Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
ok and thank you! :hug:
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UmeMuhinyi99 Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013
your welcome and is it ok to be a watch and fav the cute cat please
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PandoraMichaelis Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
sure go right ahead ^-^
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UmeMuhinyi99 Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013
thank
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Si1VeR-ReBoRn Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2013   Writer
Good job you did a great on the imagery!
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PandoraMichaelis Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thanks! :D
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A7XFan666 Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013
Some of their song titles and song lyrics are in it :D
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PandoraMichaelis Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
yup :)
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A7XFan666 Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013
Hehe =)
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BleachingLiliesBlack Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
AMAZING! I LOVE HOW YOU INCORPORATED SOME OF THEIR SONG TITLES IN IT! :iconbatglompplz: :iconbvbplz:
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saevuswinds Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013  Student Writer
I hope things get better...it sucks losing friends.
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PandoraMichaelis Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
yes,yes it does. meh things are getting better I made new friends and all :D
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moon-lit-words Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2013
critique as provided by #SayItHere

the analogy that the 'devil' is a weapon for protection - this would imply the narrator of the poem is using this 'devil' the same as one uses any sort of tool; this is a one way relationship. the narrator then finds him/herself being used by the 'devil' and is upset; does this seem hypocritical to you? those incidents clash too much for me with the shorter length of the piece

poetry advice from an old man: poetry reads punctuation to punctuation, not line to line. line breaks don't need commas for this reason. read your piece aloud, punct. to punct. with the appropriate verbal pause for the marks you have, and see if you get the feel from the piece you wanted. line breaks are almost essentially an aesthetic form which helps group the building blocks of the poem as a whole
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GoldenFlameNaLu Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2013
thazz deep!!! Woah!!
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PandoraMichaelis Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
ikr! I like to write that type of poetry >.<
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GoldenFlameNaLu Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013
hehe itt wazz awesome!~ dont worry!~
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KOAnimation Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
nice poem :) i really feel your anger through it. Its good. Since you have a critique request, i will say something that could improve it is trying to not use as many connectives (this is something I know I'm guilty of ^^; ) The last line "Which is Hell" seems sort of weak, because of this. Maybe something like "The fires of hell", or "Your hellfire", or something more descriptive.

The only other thing I will say is at the beginning you say "I am a fallen angel", yet later you say "I even lost my wings". Usually, these mean the same things, and angels don't fall twice. I think you were going for the wings as a life source, but this is still a little bit confusing, and might be something to work on for the future.
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PandoraMichaelis Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you,I will try to fix those errors :D and watch out on my future poems for the mistakes
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KOAnimation Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
You're welcome :D
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